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Love in a London Tube Stop (Under Construction) - Team Epilogue

Title: Love in a London Tube Stop (Under Construction)
Team: Team Epilogue
Author: klynie1
Prompt: The Chariot
Wordcount: About 18,400
Rating: NC-17-lite
Warnings: Infidelity (but in an open marriage, which should probably be another warning, I suppose), Open marriage (see?), Cheating (for readers who are hopelessly honest), A Very Tiny Bit of girl-kissing-girl action
Summary: A Romance, In Diverse Parts, Involving Champions, Cheating and Chariots in Various and Sundry Combinations.
Author's Note: A literal translation of my card, as a tribute to the Chariot many ride: the London Underground. Hugs and love to Team Epilogue. Any mistakes you notice are my own.
Disclaimer: Harry Potter, Draco Malfoy and all associated characters from the Harry Potter universe are the property of J.K. Rowling and those to whom she has licensed her creations, including without limitation Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books, Raincoat Books, and Warner Bros., Inc. No copyright infringement is intended. The author is making no profit from this story.



Love in a London Tube Stop (Under Construction)



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I thoroughly enjoyed this from beginning to end. It's paced just right, and there were so many deft touches of humor sprinkled in , like Astoria changing her name to Asteria, Draco misleading Harry about whether the guest or host pours, the Goblin law firm on retainer to the Malfoys, and the absurd name of the Durmstrang champion.

I also liked how you explored the concept of winning: for Bytzal, it's winning the Cup for her school; for Harry, it's getting Draco to break his own rules; for Draco, it's restoring Malfoy honor; for Albus and Scorpius - well, I don't want to spoil it for anyone reading the comments. Quite well done, anon author! :)

(Anonymous)

I adore this so much. So many clever lines!
This was completely wonderful. I loved it from the first word to the last. The characterizations were spot-on. I especially liked the name of the goblin law firm; and the fact that Draco's chair became a throne while Harry's became a hard wooden chair. Harry's moral struggle compared to Draco's complete indifference to anything standing in his way (like oh say, rules) was beautifully written.

The story was laugh-out-loud funny, without being slapsticky (is that a word?) or silly. Draco's comment to Scorpius to treasure his hair while he had it had me rolling on the floor laughing. Your portrayal of Draco and Scorpius' relationship made me smile. Their obvious affection was touching. I loved that he calls Draco Papa.

Albus and Scorpius - well no spoilers, but they are absolutely brilliant. This is definitely a story that I will read again and again.
No spoilers from me either. This was one of the most enjoyable epilogue fics I've ever read. The bantering and each character trying to get what they want and Harry not understanding the changing rules was brilliant. I must say one of my favourite scenes was the one at the Three Broomsticks. I loved when Scorpius described his reasoning for challenging the Sorting Hat and Draco comprehending what his son had done was *love*. Oh, and the Goblet of Fire reasoning and history was superb.
cool!
Oh my gosh, this was so, so wonderful! There were so many awesome things in it, and the ending made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. And the boys! Oh, the boys. :D
I loved Scorpius and Al's sorting!! That was the best. Thanks for a fun story.
Oh so very enjoyable! *applauds* I'm a sucker for a H/D/ fic with a side of AS/S (or the other way around)...so this was total love for me. And I ADORED your Harry and Draco more than words can say. Yeah you!
another fantastic story from team epilogue! your harry and draco are wonderful. harry has his heart in the right place--i loved his qualms about cheating, his insistence on having made a promise to ginny and to honor that promise, his refusal to go along with draco's rules, etc. your draco made me laugh so many times with his perfectly creased pants, his scheming, and his ridiculous sex rules. it was wonderful to see draco as such a doting father.

i also liked the plot in general, esp. that both al and scorpius were taking part in the tournament [i also have a big weakness for al/scorpius in h/d fics, so i went "awww" when al confesses he loves scorpius]. i'd love to hear more about why you decided to tie the story to the tube because while i saw some connections at times [like, at the end, when they are actually in an abandoned part of the underground], the overall meaning is unclear to me. like, how do all the station names relate to the story segments? when i first read the title, i was expecting a story that was directly tied to the tube, so i was a little confused at first when it turns out the triwizard tournament is the actual focus. i'd love to hear any of your ideas about the connection between that and the tube :)

(Anonymous)

i was expecting a story that was directly tied to the tube, so i was a little confused

Thanks for the constructive feedback! The whole story was paced to feel like an underground journey - sort of fast and seeming to be a bit out of control, but the train gets you to the station in the end. I was hoping to get across the metaphor that the chariot/underground is powerful, a bit dangerous and yet, ultimately under control and headed in the right direction. It gets you where you need to be, but it's always an adventure. Of all of the subways that I've ridden, the London tube has always seemed most like a train in that regard - others, more technically updated, have seemed very smooth, streamlined and automated (and therefore, without a lot of character). Sorry that didn't work for you.
This was a lot of fun to read. The characterizations were great and those sex rules were hilarious!
Thank you for the warning although they were all pretty much not what I thought they were in the story. Luckily, I didn't back down from the fic even after you forewarned that the fic might contain infidelity. Suffice to say, I was delighted to read that things happened and ended the way they did. This was funny as hell, too. The characterizations, particularly. Draco resembles a bird whose feathers had been ruffled one too many times and Harry is like a lost puppy without an owner. Then those two boys... they are perfect for each other.

And then this:
"Astoria kept the Paris flat and changed her name to Asteria for some obscure reason."

And this:
Harry thought that having a name in any form that could be shortened to 'Ass' was mad

Were reasons why I had tears in my eyes and an aching stomach after I finished reading the story. I don't know if it's meant to be irony or whatever, but it's the first time Draco's wife's name makes sense to me, since I could never figure out which spelling is the right now. *laughs again*

Thank you for this excellent work.
It's Astoria, but I like this way best of all! Soooo fannish meta.

(JKR's writing makes it look like it might be Asteria in the little next-gen family tree that is posted all over the place, it's true, but I listened to her PotterCast interview and there's no question but that she says "Astoria". PotterCast 131, about 23 minutes in, if you'd like to listen to the mp3 for yourself!)
That was just too much fun! I love your Draco and your Harry was perfect.

Nicely done, Team Epilogue!
Lovely, so well written. I loved the plot and the characterisations. Really fun but also moving and thought provoking.

Turnipblood, lol.

And I loved the kids too and also the way their fathers interacted with them. Very believable and everyone felt fleshed out. Scorpius, ah, I'd love to see more of your Scorpius.

Really well done. :)
This story was a fun romp! The pace of this fic was extraordinary. The witty banter really flew. I can hardly believe it was 18k. Your Al and Scorpius were great. And the one liners... I can even start to list them, but I think one of my favs is "Who would want to be an Auror? Stupid job." *g*

eta: How could I forget: "Astoria kept the Paris flat and changed her name to Asteria for some obscure reason." bwahahahaha!!


Edited at 2008-05-07 01:26 pm (UTC)
Fun, fun, fun story. Draco was hysterical here. He had such strong emotions, I can not believe he did not give himself a heart attack! You use of humor and command of one liners was wonderful. I loved your Al, a lot of stories I have read have him as unsure, but that could have been because he was so young when we see him in book 7. Your Al as a resourceful snake instead of a lion I loved especially as he is so much more cunning than Harry at times. Too funny! The sex rules, loved them. Great story!
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