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Lamp in the Cooling Room - Team EWE

Title: Lamp in the Cooling Room
Team: EWE
Author: libby_drew
Prompt: The Lovers
Wordcount: ˜9000
Rating: R
Warnings: none
Summary: Draco and Harry become snared in a trap, but they're not alone. Love guides our path for reasons we can't always understand.
Author's Note: The Lovers: A card of crossroads, tension, and a decision. Duty or your heart's desire? A test that affects the rest of your life. Endless thanks to my beta readers.

Lamp in the Cooling Room


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Comments

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Apart from the fact that I'm in love with this title and therefore more than slightly positively biased, I have to tell you that I know this story will make me think deeply for a long time to come.

I love, love, love your characterisations of Harry and Draco. I read the story and I believe you love them and understand what makes them tick. That you are also able to paint such a vivid and believable scenario in which no one person appears any less well formed than another is something I envy deeply. You don't try to make Malfoy outwardly 'nice', even though inwardly he so obviously is. The way the little girl picks Malfoy apart and lays bare things he would not have on display is so, so clever and I wonder where on earth you discovered how to write a child so perfectly. You must be a parent.

Nothing about this piece shouts or jumps up and grabs my attention away from the overall story, and that's why it's so strong. It builds on itself in such a way that the momentum increases as the story progresses and by the time I got to the end I was barely breathing for the tension.

I think this is an amazing story.

:)

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thanks again for everything, dear. I couldn't have written it without you. *hugs*

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:28 pm (UTC)
Your skill in telling this story is incredible. I could never imagine such a story never mind bring it to life with the written word as you have. The characterizations of Harry and Draco are so deep, yet so spot on. I loved it, except at the end I wanted them to come out and be alright and we just do not know that, or at least I can admit I need to see it in black and white. But it really does not matter because in losing freedom and being thrown together they found each other instead. Very thought provoking and well done!

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you! It's great to hear from you. :) I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story, and as far as the ending is concerned...whatever you want to happen is what happened. ;)

Thanks again and take care.

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:28 pm (UTC)
Now this, this is a masterpiece.

Lamp in the Cooling Room

That is indeed a compliment. :D Thank you!

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:28 pm (UTC)
Wow. Just...

I'm quite hopelessly in love with this child. And with the two men who are so true to character throughout, and yet still find their way to one another. I had tears in my eyes at the end.

This was brilliant, and I'm humbled. You are quite simply a phenomenal story teller. Well done.

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Your comment made me smile all day. It's such a pleasure to entertain you, love. I'm happy you enjoyed it. *hugs*

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:27 pm (UTC)
I loved this fic. I read it… four hours ago, and didn't feel up to attempting a coherent review until now…

I loved the way the story all fit together. Like Calanthe said, there weren't any little bits that dragged attention away from the rest of it. I loved the little girl, and the way she understands Harry and Draco so clearly, and how her perceptiveness lets the reader into their characters better than any anonymous narrator could. I loved that she doesn't have a name, I don't know why, but I found that very poignant (is that the right word?).

This story is one of the best fanfics I've ever read, and definitely my favorite fic in this competition so far. I teared up when Draco says that Death doesn't care about the weather, and by the end, my stomach was doing weird things and I could hardly see to read. I think I sat staring at the last paragraph for almost ten minutes before I could even begin to think of anything else.

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you very much. This is a lovely and flattering comment, and I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed the story. As for the girl, I debated giving her a name, but I'm glad I didn't. As you say, I'd like to think it added a bit of poignancy to her character.

Thanks again for the comment. :D

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:27 pm (UTC)
Beautiful story, wonderful writing.

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:26 pm (UTC)
I'm so overwhelmed by this. I love every single part. The subtle tension, the boys finding their way to each other...and the little girl...perfect.

You have woven an amazing story that captured my heart.

Lamp in the Cooling Room

And what an amazing heart it is to capture. ;) I'm glad you enjoyed it, darling. Always a pleasure to entertain you. *hugs*

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:26 pm (UTC)
I love this story. I won't be able to say it half as well as others, but I do.

Oh, man. The little girl -- without a name! -- is the perfect narrator for this. She has an incisive way that cuts directly to the heart of the matter, which is exactly what Draco and Harry need. She tugged on my heartstrings with the microwave dinners and busy parents; it's so terribly realistic how adultish she acts and how responsible she feels.

Great characterisation of Draco and Harry, too. The exchange about sarcasm limns Draco so well -- he's angry but he won't say it; he won't let the child die, but why should he disillusion Potter, etc.

And the writing. So tight and evocative.

I'll shut up now, but thank you for this. :)

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you for reading and commenting, and for your thoughtful feedback. I'm so happy you enjoyed it. :D

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:26 pm (UTC)
I've had numerous conversations with folks about "has fandom burnt it self out"/"have we told all the stories about H/D and now we're recycling". This fic makes me say a resounding "No". Sure there have been "outsider" POVs of H/D done before, but this is original: the girl, the set up, the interactions, and the gut wrenching choices. I love the story. I love the characters, the writing, the sheer beauty of short story that packs an incredibly powerful and evocative punch. There is just so much to think about here and so much to feel. This story will stay with me for a long time and that is truly the mark of something special. I will remember this. It will not bleed into the hodge podge of a thousand other H/Ds.

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you, darling. *hugs* And thanks for previewing it in the locker room for me. I really feel it wouldn't have been nearly the story it was without everybody's help. ♥

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:25 pm (UTC)
Oh, this story is going to haunt me for a long time. It was so original and the way it was done was brilliant. I'm just horrible at comments, but really, stunning!

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you! You're not horrible at comments! That you read and left feedback is a wonderful gift. Thanks again! *hugs*

Edited at 2008-05-27 01:25 pm (UTC)

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you so much for reading and leaving such a kind and thoughtful comment. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story. Harry has always reminded me of a panther -- I've been dying to use that in a fic. ;D

Thanks again.
Oh, this is absolutely beautiful; extraordinarily well-written and refreshingly original. The girl's child-like mannerisms were perfect: she was innocent yet not idiotic; intelligent yet not unbelievable - a balance few achieve when writing child characters. You've not only managed to create a three-dimensional original character, but portray Harry and Draco through her eyes and make a huge change in their relationship believable so succinctly. Harry and Draco themselves were really well-characterised, the latter especially - I love that we learn more about Draco because the girl can read him.
The real beauty of this story was the plot and you've made it work admirably. The ending was ambiguous throughout the story and I love that you've left it go unsaid, yet confirmed with the subtext of the sunlight; the moment the reader works it out is jolting.

I cried, I loved, I commend.

Congratultions, this is a wonderful piece of work; I know I will remember it for a long time yet.

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you very much for such an amazing compliment. When there are so many fics to read and remember, I'm flattered that this one will stay with you.

Thanks again. :D
Oh, wow. I was convinced the little girl was somehow part of the trap. Interesting ending as it really leave the whole thing open as to whether they survive or not.

Lamp in the Cooling Room

It is open-ended, and I'd like to think people are comfortable making their own decisions as to what happened. ;)

Thanks very much for reading and commenting.

(Anonymous)

I read this fic a few hours ago and I

(Anonymous)

Ups, sorry!I'll start again...

When I'd read this fic I didn't even know how to begin a comment on it: it's been a long time since a piece of writing last had this effect on me. The style, the apparent simplicity of the story and its underlying depth of meaning have left me without words. I'm impressed at the sheer skill involved in conveying such powerful emotions through the six-year old narrator (a gem!)... A work of art!

On another note, I must admit I'm a little confused by the last paragraph, though I think it may very well be denial on my part... I know some comments have mentioned it and I would really appreciate it if someone would clear my doubts as to the survival of the duo... Thanks!!

Lamp in the Cooling Room

Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate the feedback. :D As for the last few paragraphs, I tried to leave it so each reader would form their own opinions on what happened right at the end. So far that seems to be working out. ;)

Thanks again!
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